Hey, how's this story coming on?

i thought that was very good,i had a hard time trying to walk up and go help my mom while reading this story(thats a good thing) and it has a great plot from what i can see...good job!!now i wanna hear the whole thing,,,,,,,,,rawr.i really wanna hear what hapens next,also it has good imagery!(thats when the reader can see the story hapening as they read it(: )