Have you time for a few lines? Comments? Suggestions even?

That is beautiful. And I love the rhyme scheme and the form of the poem. It helps it flow so well. I like how you broke up a single line into several short lines to help the flow, and how you didn't use any particular verse structure. The imagery is lovely, the pacing is perfect. I can't come up with anything that you should change. Maybe make it a little longer (if you want). And I'm only saying this because I liked it so much that it ended too soon for me! :) Then you can add some more sensory aspects, like touch and sound, because you've focused so much on the visual. Since it's such a descriptive poem, that might aid the descriptive process, and really absorb the reader in every way.